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Konohagakure 

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Gender
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Age
18

Backstory
Ever since Sayuko was a child, he was treated like a prodigy. His parents, renowned in the Uchiha clan, always favored Sayuko. He has been given special treatment and training ever since. He became quite strong physically and quite smart, but he was very spoiled and egotistical due to him being sheltered. When his parents died in a mission he took it hard, but he pushed it aside and became angry at the world.

Personality
Sayuko has a cool-headedness for dangerous situations, but when something stops going his way he loses his temper. He always cares for the mission over the safety of his teammates and is very self-centered, his priorities being far above others. He is very arrogant and tends to flex his strength. He believes he is always right and whenever he is in an argument he will not stop until he convinces the opponent otherwise. Even though he hates many people, he can keep it on hold during a mission and holds respect for his teammates as long as they can hold their own in battle. Sayuko will not talk to anybody he does not believe to be strong, as they will not be able to help him achieve greater power. He has an outlook on civilization similar to the Spartans, as he believed that fighting was the most important thing that kept society together. Sayuko will never back down from a duel and he isn't afraid to initiate one.

Goals
Sayuko aims to be the strongest shinobi in the Uchiha. He wants to be a leader. The leading positions he wants are including but not limited to, Head of the Police Force, Right Hand to the Hokage, Anbu Captain, Uchiha Clan Head, or an S-Rank level shinobi. Sayuko wants to rub off his ideals onto the village body so that everyone will have the same beliefs and be battle-ready.

Appearance

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Sayuko is medium built. He is 5 foot 11 (180 Centimeters) and weighs 180 pounds (80 kilograms). His headband is worn around his neck though you wouldn't be able to see it as his jacket covers it up. Around his forehead he wears a custom headband with an Uchiha emblem on it. The band is made of a metallic fiber which looks like the normal headband material but it is actually as strong as metal. He wears a 2 piece full body black and gray jacket and his sleeves cover his arms. Sayuko has pure black eyes and hair. When his sharingan activate, his eyes flare a burning crimson and every time he moves a streak of red is left behind. His spiky hair is angled towards the right and he wears red sandals which have white high tops. Sayuko is very athletic since he has been training hard since he was a small child.

Element
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Proficiencies
 

Skills
 

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Edited by Miles223

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While the boundaries of what you can and can't put in your characters profile in relation to what they have/haven't done and what abilities they have/haven't obtained is a rather grey area, for now I'd advise against doing it.

 

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Thanks for your input. I tried to put things in that were guaranteed because Sharingan has to have genjutsu, right? Proficiencies are not a real thing that I expect in this game but I put them there for reference to show myself and others what my character's build is trying to be.

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11 minutes ago, Nisshomaru said:

All of your images are broken (Might be from me, but I refreshed 20 times)

Also it feels as if you're powergaming before even knowing what's going to be in the game lol.

Yes - powergaming, your entire backstory is extremely OP and it even gives me itachi vibes.

 

Agreed. The character is very much so your typical Uchiha archetype (parents died when he was young, basically sole goal is power), and claiming he learned "all" of his parents jutsu (who I assume were at least around 30 years old) is quite a feat for an 18 year old. 

 

Another thing is the bit about him being a prodigy. I'd really avoid this characteristic as it is also extremely overdone, and implies a lack of character flaws, which is just entirely uninteresting.

 

 

20 hours ago, Miles223 said:

Sayuko has a unique cool-headedness.

This doesn't really make sense to me considering he was spoiled and given everything he wanted as a child. Usually, spoiled kids tend to freak out when things don't go their way, so maybe tweaking the bio a bit, you could say that he has a tendency to lose his temper when he loses control of a situation, which would be an interesting character flaw to have, something that the character is seemingly lacking

 

 

In summary, I would tweak a bunch of things in this bio, and try to develop a more original character. Uchiha whose parents died and are now seeking power are a dime a dozen in the Naruto RP community.

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Thanks for your input everybody! I have tweaked my character and I think it's a bit better.

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